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Once There Was Love; Once There Was Joy
Emotions Now Shattered Like An Old Broken Toy
Confused And Dazed, Wondering Why
Soul In A Turmoil Just Wishing To Die
The Brightest Day Now Shadows Of Night
Infecting The Heart So It Sees No Light
Thoughts Entombed By What's Been Said
A Loved One Lost At Twilights Ebb
Guided By One Whose Words They Believe
Not Seeing The Venom That Flowed To Deceive
The Only Hope Now Is To Pray To The Light
To Guide Them Back To All That Is Right.
It's tough when you have to go through this.
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BlueCaroline Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes. Nod 

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LiseBujold Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
inspiring!
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TheWhiteLighter Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you
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ulianRM Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Flows like a tear. Really inspiring!
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TheWhiteLighter Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you
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CyanideAndCake Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Enjoyed the way this was pretty seamless & well woven together.
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EetTheChildrenRAW Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
Beautifully written!
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TheWhiteLighter Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you
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EetTheChildrenRAW Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
No problem!
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem is simply life-changing. Well done.

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All the effort is pointless if you don't believe in yourself.
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TheWhiteLighter Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you
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Laur720 Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I love the way it flows, reads very nicely and I love your metre.
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TheWhiteLighter Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. I've a few other poems on my site you may like
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Laur720 Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
yw
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Sly-The-Foxx Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Flowed off the tongue nicely and was very well written.
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TheWhiteLighter Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. I've a couple of others on my site you may wish to check out
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Radoxeald Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
First of all, wonderful poem. Lots of simple yet powerful metaphors and the structure is both coherent and smooth. Reading this out loud gives it a very nice rhythm, I like it. ^^

Second, you apparently submitted this, with a couple of others, to #MLP-Literature. Unfortunately, as the group is focused on MyLittlePony related literary works, this won't be most likely accepted.

Third, :+fav: ;)
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